Random Poems 4/26

These were written a while ago in-class (I think in workshop) but never posted… [narrative poem about the Melodion (Sam's object that he brought in)] [Oh, and as if you couldn't tell, there were some words we had to use...]

i. Their relationship was all platonic at first but when she began to play her melodion, his chest felt sudsy and she took him from his own clenched fists.

ii. It is a relic of a bygone era sturdily built, the keys offer a click rather than the sudsy platonic softness of today; the case is a case in point leather with a metal zipper plush felt inside And all for such a curious device a melodion? Fist of kleptomaniac’s songs are played

[that last line is just weird...]

iii. It must have belonged to the childhood of a parent perhaps. The 50′s, 60′s, 70′s manufacturing—consumption, prosperity. A memory of music, family history. The kleptomaniac uncle who bangs his fist the platonic cousin whom he played for. dreamed of sudsy romance

[another throwaway line(s)] [[in my everlasting internal debate on whether to edit these as I post themor to just post as they're written, I chose the latter, though I couldn't resist adding commentary...

I guess I wanted to preserve the integrity of the "draft" system, whereby a true record of the progression of a piece is preserved eternally...]]

Hrm… I really need a workable “draft” system for writing on a blog… I guess what I’ve been doing works pretty well. When I post an updated version, I go back to the old one and move most of the material to the “Extended Entry” section so the post won’t take up so much real estate on the front page. For a post like this one, I was considering just moving all the first draft stuff into the Extended Entry, and doing a revision in the Entry Body… Might work…?

THEN there’s the whole question of whether to back date posts… I’d say no since anyone watching your blog would then miss out on your posting of old material. And besides, the act of dredging up old stuff is very much taking place in the present, and so should be dated such (though with a clear indication of when the material was originally written).

Comments 1

  1. Robert Bohm wrote:

    You know I think that you are able to write a good long poem full of feelings and passion. Go ahead!

    Posted 23 May 2006 at 6:30 pm

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